Story Battle 8 – Beatrice Bee and Rat Boy vs. Bad Summer Rain
Story Battle 8
Story Battles are a fun addition to the Storyland website, just to see the different aspects of the stories I write. The two stories for this battle are:
- Story 1 – Beatrice Bee and Rat Boy
- Story 2 – Bad Summer Rain
The winner of Battle 8 is Beatrice Bee and Rat Boy with 81 points.
STORY 1
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STORY 2
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QUESTIONS | Points | Points | ||
1. Encouraging words – 1 pt each | I’m not going to hurt you, I am glad you won’t hurt me, I won’t hurt you either, You don’t need to be afraid of us, There is no need to be afraid, I will never sting you, if you don’t bite me, I don’t see why we can’t be friends, I see no reason either | 9 | the rain stopped, sun shining, enjoyed playing, nice and sunny outside, isn’t running right now | 5 |
2. Disappointing words – 1 pt each | Are you animals rats?, you don’t like us, I am afraid of you, We didn’t do anything to you, Shouldn’t I be afraid of you, Why are you so afraid of rats, your teeth are sharp, hurt if you were to bite, You have a stinger, that would hurt, Rats have a bad rap, thought to be afraid of, nobody can really tell us why, think we are going to sting | 14 | looks like it might rain, very rainy summer so far, Bad summer rain, sky looked really dark, heard thunder, it started to pour, started raining again, not impressed, I had to bring him back inside because of the rain, it started to pour rain, angrily | 11 |
3. Animal characters – 10 pts for each | Beatrice Bee, Rat Boy | 20 | no animal characters | 0 |
4. Character names are two words or more – 10 pts each | Beatrice Bee, Rat Boy | 20 | Baby Troll, Troll Mother, Troll Daddy | 30 |
5. “GR” words – 1 pt for each | no “GR” words | 0 | no “GR” words | 0 |
6. Mention of trees – 10 pts | no mention of trees | 0 | no mention of trees | 0 |
7. Mention of flowers – 10 pts | no mention of flowers | 0 | no mention of flowers | 0 |
8. Mention of word “like” – 5 pts for each | It sounds like you don’t like us, That is just like with us bees | 15 | looks like it might rain | 5 |
9. Descriptive words – 1 pt for each | hot, sticky, teeth are sharp | 3 | very rainy, really dark | 0 |
10. Story has sad ending – 10 pts | no, story has happy ending because they became friends | 0 | yes, story has sad ending because it started to rain | 10 |
TOTAL SCORE: | 81 | 61 |
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